Here´s another excerpt from my upcoming novel "Hickory Street"
I wonder if I´ve written it in such a way that it´s clear enough to understand what´s going on without it being too clear. Looking forward to any comment:
Presenting two teenage boys: Harm and Mike
Harm and Mike had found each other as
friends from the very first day and their friendship grew tighter for each day
that passed. The Friedenhoff couple were a bit surprised to see this. Mike had
never been very interested in reading books, unless there were more pictures
than words, but within just a few weeks he had actually been seen reading the
Harry Potter series. Of course they were thrilled and even began to reconsider
their decision to enroll him at summer school next year.
One Saturday they were both sitting in
Mike´s room reading. Mike was holding the first part of “The Lord of the Rings”
with both hands sitting in his bed with his feet up and his back to the window.
He occasionally rotated the book to one side to get a better look at the
pictures and nodded with content at them. Sometimes the pictures were so
amazing that he had to look up and ask Harm to join him. Then they would both
look at the pictures with their eyes dilated and their mouths half open.
Yes, those pictures in that book really
were worth studying thoroughly, they agreed.
So, what do you think?
Is it clear enough? Is it too obvious? And mostly: is it funny or just plain boring?
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